Sunday, June 15, 2008

We folded our pain

Into origami frogs

And tried to laugh

When they wouldn’t jump

Poem? Or not? It was meant to be a poem. Does it work? Poe's criterion, "the rhythmical creation of beauty" is the supreme test. Does this pass? He didn't say rhyme, but never wrote anything that didn't. And is rhyme necessary? Yes. Unless... and so is this one of those "unless" times?

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